Hey Erax, don't worry, you're doing very well without it- you have a different angle (good!), and I would hate to see you change it unneccessarily!
Besides, I must admit, I have tried my hand at screenwriting a few times, so I tend to be more comfortable with light exsposition and heavy dialogue to move a story along. I anm trying to work on that though.
I posted chapter 3, so I am looking forward to more customers for my dru- er, I mean readers for my non-addictive and totaly 'free' story.
And Ragnaork, you can run, but you can't hiiiiidee...