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a leather bag?

Originally posted by narf poit chez BOOM:
I'm writing a non-SEIV story and have decided to post snippets here, for feedback and such.Hopefully, this will help me actually finish it. The snippets will come from random sections as I'm going to try writing the key scenes first and then fill in the blanks. The genre is kinda mixed. Sci-fi enhanced hero/mystery. So, what do you think:

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"How much longer is this going to take?"
"Hey, we didn't complain when you took half an hour to build that tunnel."
"I had to make sure it was shored up. It was nessasary to emplace supports."
"And we gotta route around the security, make sure we're not trippen security and then laser a chunk out after deactivating security without trippen the aforementioned security. Pleae remember not to turn on your sensers."
"I know."
There was silence as the hulking, metal-clad figure engaged in a fruitless game of appearing not to figet as the two unarmed figures tweaked busily at various devices attached to the ceiling and on the floor.
After a space of about ten minutes during which the metal-clad figure managed to aviod interupting, one of them spoke absent-mindedly "Security systems are deactivated. The laser."
A button on a circular, wide and bulky device was pushed by the other unarmered figure and a gentle humming emenated from it. Nothing could be seen and the bulky figure increased it's figeting, until a few minutes later when one of the figures again spoke: "We're through."
Both figures lithely swung themselves up and apparently into the ceiling. Cracking open several select deposit boxes, they emptied the contents into two sacks they had brought along, then randomly emptied more until they had roughly filled both sacks. Swinging back down through the hole, a foot brushed a certain box. "Got it. Let's split."
"I thank you both." Two armored hands shot out and crushed both necks. Both figures flickered. Rapidly assesing the situation, the hulking figure spun to the left and observed both figures rapidly receding on what could only be described as skinny atv's, both with a sack. Looking down, he noticed his BB-4, with wiring attached and more importantly, surounded by nano-cutters attached to power cells. His armor was not up to this in it's current state. He ran.

A specification problem fixed.

Oh, and does anyone have any good pages on explosives bookmarked? I need to get the proporties of BB-4 right. Like, how much of a fictional substance would the characters need to implode a bank, after blowing the vault door off.

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