The thing is I am not very good at critiqing other peoples work when it comes to story telling. I like what you have written thus far and note that as you write more your work gets better. I like the format and the content of the story. I find it easy to read and follow. Good work so please keep writing. And please do not get discuraged by lack of posts in your story theard. People read but seldom post. Tis the way of things.
Now if you were a published author with six or seven books under your belt with millions coming in for the movie deals, then, and only then, could you expect a LOT of comments.
