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Imperator Fyron said:
Ok, you asked for grammatical critiquing, so here it is. 
Quotes and the stating of who said them should be separated by commas, not periods. This set:
"Order the Potemkin to fall back. Ravager and Osired are to escort her." Admiral Roeding ordered, clutching at the railing before him.
Should instead be:
"Order the Potemkin to fall back. Ravager and Osired are to escort her," Admiral Roeding ordered, clutching at the railing before him.
You've repeated this everywhere. Only when there is a question or exclamation do you use that instead of a comma.
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I knew that rule. I use that rule. WTF is going on?!
<pauses for a second.> I hate MS Word.