[Starhawk]

Well by now a lot of you have probobly read my Icaran story and the like so I decided I would make a thread (outside of the story because I don't want to clog the story thread any further) asking you all what some of you might think of the Icaran culture (likes dislikes that sort of thing).
As well as some questions for you all on my story and hte like.

Well for one I know that unfortunately I have not gone in to as much depth with their society as I would like but that's mainly because I don't know how far you guys would take before being offended and I don't want to offend any of you guys. So any tips here on how much of the "controversial" things I could let into the story would help, such as their justice system for example.


Question #2: I'd like to ask you guys is this, I have gotten a little "vivid" in some of the violent scenes but in upcoming chapters as the war hits it's strides things could get worse, how much "gore" is okay on these threads?

Question #3: Well I know I've "tech wanked" some stuff up and I am trying to be more realistic then Star Trek because I loathe their constant changes in just about every tech. (main reason I've stayed away from transporters lol) So how much "tech wank" do you think I've had on a scale of 1-10 and what areas do you think I could lose without detracting from the story?


Question #4:I have stated the official religious points of view of the Icarans only in passing because of the fear of offending people, so here again (I would not mock religions out of my actual viewpoints btw) how far would it be okay to describe without offending any of you?


Final Question: Is my writing style improving (this is very important to me, as I am hoping to be an author and am even taking writing courses in college) and what areas are still a little weak? (please be gentle here)



The reason I ask all of these is because I really value your folks opinion as readers (you are some of the more educated boardmembers I've encountered, for example the folks over at Relic boards would probobly have stopped reading my story in chapter 2 and screamed me out of the forums) so I base you all as a good "starting fan base" for any of my future works.

Though if I do write books you'll have to pay to read them hehe.