Cool, thanks! I've given it a little read over and can't think of anything to add. It's short and to the point, and that's the way I like things.
[/quote] Will this other story you mentioned be set in the same galaxy as HifH or is it a complete departure?
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The new story is a pretty big departure. It's set in the future, but it's not really the future of Earth, but of a fantasy realm, so you have things like the filthy rich riding around on dragons, wizards complaining that personal teleporters are putting them out of business, orcs and trolls cleaning floors, that sort of madness.