Edi, after a quick look it seems you really did extensive fixing. A few things that caught my eye:
- You sometimes use lower case for units, like "The asp turtle" at the very beginning, or "iron ancestor" for "Iron Ancestor" while at the same time you use "Tomb Oracles" and "Seal Guards" at the next occasion. How come?
- I think that it should be "appetite" instead of "appetites" in most cases, but then again I'm not a native English speaker. (see, I even have to capitalize that word...
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