Re: In-Game Typos
I135 The Aegis
The description reads:
"This is a round shield of hardened leather with tufts of goat hair surrounding its edge. Upon the leather surface, the unknown maker painted an extremely vivid image of the Medusa. The image is so vivid that anyone who meets the mad gaze of the painted eyes will be instantly petrified. Anyone fighting the Aegis-bearer will thus have trouble watching and predicting the Aegis-bearer's moves as he tries to avoid the leering face of the Medusa."
1."the Medusa"
This should be changed to "Medusa". Stheno, Euryale, and Medusa were the names of the Gorgon sisters. Saying "the Medusa" is akin to saying "the David".
2."Anyone fighting the Aegis-bearer will thus have trouble watching and predicting the Aegis-bearer's moves as he tries to avoid the leering face of the Medusa."
This isn't really a typo and I don't know what Illwinters stance on feminine and masculine pronouns is so this may or may not be an issue. Technically, if you don't know the sex of the person it is standard English to use "he," "him," or "his." However, the gender issue could be avoided if the sentence was rewritten as "Anyone fighting the Aegis-bearer will thus have trouble watching and predicting the Aegis-bearer's moves as they try to avoid the leering face of the Medusa.". Of course, if "he" is being used everywhere in cases when the sex isn't known there is no point in changing it as it is still standard English.
3."... the unknown maker painted an extremely vivid image of the Medusa."
Again not really a typo but I would have thought the one who forged the item would be the maker and thus the maker is not unknown.
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The first point is the only one I think needs to be fixed the other two are just observations.
So at the very least the description should read:
"This is a round shield of hardened leather with tufts of goat hair surrounding its edge. Upon the leather surface, the unknown maker painted an extremely vivid image of Medusa. The image is so vivid that anyone who meets the mad gaze of the painted eyes will be instantly petrified. Anyone fighting the Aegis-bearer will thus have trouble watching and predicting the Aegis-bearer's moves as he tries to avoid the leering face of Medusa."
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