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Old January 31st, 2009, 12:43 PM
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Default Re: Chronicles_EA: Second-pass Signup and Discussion
One small problem: the beginning of the first paragraph was present-tense, but then it switches to past-tense later on.

Another problem: There's nothing to tell us when the viewpoint switches.

Other than that, great story Ruminant.
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