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April 7th, 2004, 12:26 PM
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Re: OT: Story Snippet
Looks good
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April 8th, 2004, 01:03 AM
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Re: OT: Story Snippet
OK, got it now. Three ppl/ figures: One in armour, two without. Careful not to confuse "unarmed" with "unarmored"/"unarmoured".(US/UK spelling repsectively)
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April 8th, 2004, 01:42 AM
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Re: OT: Story Snippet
Various words spelled 'creatively' - necessary, fidget, interrupting, emanated etc. Of course, in the spirit of all grammar Posts, I've probably made some mistakes in this post too.  |
April 7th, 2004, 02:23 PM
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Re: OT: Story Snippet
A good start, but the dialog is a bit confusing.
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April 7th, 2004, 08:30 PM
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Re: OT: Story Snippet
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Various words spelled 'creatively' - necessary, fidget, interrupting, emanated etc. Of course, in the spirit of all grammar Posts, I've probably made some mistakes in this post too.
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A good start, but the dialog is a bit confusing.
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You mean, as to who is saying what in the beginning? I'm trying to keep the villian parts a bit vague, but the introductory peice for them clears up who's who.
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April 7th, 2004, 08:33 PM
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Re: OT: Story Snippet
Typing it all in notepad I see
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April 7th, 2004, 08:52 PM
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Re: OT: Story Snippet
Owt wrong with notepad. I can fully understand anyone who prefers notepad to Word.
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