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May 31st, 2007, 06:03 PM
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Re: LA Hoburgs Intro (short story)
nice story
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June 6th, 2007, 11:48 PM
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Re: LA Hoburgs Intro (short story)
I'd meant to release this with the second half of the story but I'll just post it.
It still needs some work, this is version 0.1 though. I may have just broken some of the spells fiddling with them.
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June 7th, 2007, 09:41 AM
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Re: LA Hoburgs Intro (short story)
Nice on the artifacts, but somehow zero gold cost disturbs me. Especially if it looks like this. I would suggest adding "does not heal" to the list of attributes, too, because it does makes sense and would balance out these constructs.
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June 7th, 2007, 09:53 AM
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Re: LA Hoburgs Intro (short story)
Well, as magic beings they would still heal in labs.
Should I add "does not heal" to the basic clockwork horror or only to the ones that you recruit?
Is their magic too powerful?
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June 7th, 2007, 10:15 AM
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Re: LA Hoburgs Intro (short story)
Yes, I meant the "does not heal" which requires them to return to a lab. Which really makes sense, I think, even if they're more mechanical than magical. Just a suggestion, you decide.
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