Post your Dom3 Haiku - Page 2

Kamamura · #1 March 11th, 2008, 08:16 AM

I would like to remind (especially the founder of the thread), that to qualify as a haiku, you must at least conform to the 5/7/5 syllable structure.

Mad god from the depths
dreamers answer his calling
Svatopluk's his name

(That actually happened, here in Czech Svatopluk is a quite common, homely name, to have a giant Lovecraftian behemoth with tentacles and three legs called Svatopluk seemed extremely funny to all who saw my game in progress).

lch · #2 March 11th, 2008, 10:10 AM

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Kamamura said:
I would like to remind (especially the founder of the thread), that to qualify as a haiku, you must at least conform to the 5/7/5 syllable structure.

Only if you're following Kyoshi's "traditional" movement. The syllables are formed differently than in Japanese, anyway, so even adhering to the 5-7-5 structure doesn't guarantee a good rythm. If you keep it short, that should be sufficient.

Saxon · #3 March 11th, 2008, 10:13 AM

The fearsome SC
The pride of high protection
The AN death bless

Hmm, the abbreviations do not help the poetry, will work on this more. The syllable's work, but the letters instead of words take away the grace of the poem.

VedalkenBear · #4 March 11th, 2008, 10:35 AM

I think a _much_ better exercise would be to do a renga, but I'm not sure if anyone else even knows what that is.

The Japanese restriction should be adhered to as much as possible, IMO. But then, if you do, you come out with something _extremely_ short (cf. my haiku).

lch · #5 March 11th, 2008, 10:43 AM

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VedalkenBear said:
I think a _much_ better exercise would be to do a renga, but I'm not sure if anyone else even knows what that is.

You need two people for that, first of all.

vfb · #6 March 11th, 2008, 11:05 AM

It's a little like this, isn't it? Except, not funny.

http://fromearth.net/LetsPlay/Boatmurdered/

Jazzepi · #7 March 11th, 2008, 11:23 AM

This is for fun
Worry about restrictions
All fun is lost

Jazzepi

Saxon · #8 March 12th, 2008, 08:49 AM

Sansanjaun,

When you are done the AAR for the game, can you let us know where it is posted? I would love to read it. Playing in the game makes for much more interesting reading!

Why does this haiku
Sound exactly like a long
And boring sentence?

K · #9 March 12th, 2008, 05:55 PM

Casting killer Wish
Taking your awesome Auglermeir
Your army loses.

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I think I misspelled the luck sword name.

Firewalker · #10 March 12th, 2008, 07:10 PM

Welcome Arch Devil
Serving roasted markata
Bandar PD sucks.