Othaglot and Cane - Story Thread

dogscoff · #1 June 7th, 2002, 09:41 AM

Baron - Good points, although I plan to address quite a few of them when Othaglot gets to Ceres IV - You might have seen a hint that human eating habits there aren't quite the same as they are on Earth. More about that about chapter 10ish.

As for shorter, blander... I can't argue with that. It didn't get the same level of reworking as the others. I might have another go at it. I've been seriously considering merging Chapter 1& 2 together, 3 & 4 & 5 together, so that it's one chapter from O, one chapter from C...

Chapter 4 is a little more lively, and things get even better after that

Chapter 4 is now up, BTW. Rollo will be pleased to learn that he has a cameo, albeit in anagrammatical form=-)

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dogscoff · #2 June 7th, 2002, 02:20 PM

OK, help needed. I want a sub-aquatic oxygen breathing race for later in the Othaglot & Cane story. I could use the Sergetti, or I could make something up, but I'm kind of hoping someone will have a more suitable race already invented. If you have one/ know of one, send me the _AI_General file.

Ta.

spacefan · #3 June 7th, 2002, 03:10 PM

The Fazrah description says they are an aquatic race originally, and oxygen breathing. They might be a bit warlike for your purposed though. Who knows.

dmm · #4 June 7th, 2002, 05:30 PM

Good story, but so far Othaglot is coming off as inferior to Cane, which is probably not what you'd intended.

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geoschmo · #5 June 7th, 2002, 05:42 PM

Inferior? You think? I am not getting that at all. Perhaps less comfortable with the situation. But that is to be expected I think considering he is not as used to dealing with alien cultures as Cane is.

Not to mention the fact that an criminal investigator in the Cue Cappa race would not have the same skill level as his human counterpart. My impession so far is that Cue Cappa soceity is more structured, so there would be less crime to investigate.

Cue investigators are probably more like accident investigators, what happened, how, and why, cause and effect. Where a Cane would be more used to dealing with personalities, lying, and other duplicitousness that a member of a psychic race would have little experience with.

I am looking forward to seeing where Otho can bring something constuctive to the investigation though besides just keeping Cane company.

But it's still early. They are just now really getting into the investigation.

Geoschmo

dogscoff · #6 June 8th, 2002, 04:10 PM

I wanted to keep the balance of power/ usefulness quite even, with the two characters taking the lead alternately. Of course, I'm still getting to know them myself, so it might take me a while to get this right.

Othaglot comes into his own a bit more from Chapter 6 onwards.

I've just written Chapter 5, but won't be posting it for a day or two. I think it's my favourite chapter so far - we get some decent evidence and the mystery starts to open up a little.

BTW, if anyone ever gets any ideas about the mystery, please don;t post them here - you might spoil it for others if you get it right.
I'd be happy to accept emails on the subject though. I won't tell you if you're right or not, but I'd be interesting to see what paths my puzzle leads ppl down.

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dogscoff · #7 June 12th, 2002, 11:40 PM

Chapter 5 is up. Sorry about the delay, I've had it written (and chapter 6 & 7 too=-) nd ready for a week, but haven't had time to upload it.
Click my banner and then click "fiction".

Slight tweaks to previous chapters, but nothing important- cosmetic changes only, really.

CapnQ - Thanks for your message. I couldn't see the error you mentioned though.