MP: Chronicles_EA: Second-pass Signup and Discussion

[lch]

Holy ****. Ruminant just dumped 20k characters of Prologue in the Wiki. Maybe you misunderstood the objective - you're not supposed to write the whole novel in the prologue, you're supposed to develop the story over time, m'kay??

[Ruminant]

Haha, yes. I have troubles with cutting things out. Plus we took too long to start and my mind began to wander..

It's ok though because I will post only in haiku form from now on.

[Darkwind]

One small problem: the beginning of the first paragraph was present-tense, but then it switches to past-tense later on.

Another problem: There's nothing to tell us when the viewpoint switches.

Other than that, great story Ruminant.

[Ruminant]

Ooh, good call Darkwind. I changed tenses so many times to see what would sound better, guess I forgot to make something match up. And yes.. I may have to see about editing that unholy wall of text so it is readable by the human eye.

So. Noones owned up to being Yomi yet.. If noone has by the deadline I'll delete 'em.

[Incabulos]

I submitted EA Abysia.