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Old April 10th, 2003, 08:00 PM

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Ok this is the first scene i wrote, i'll be posting the next few in a few days, hopefully you guys will enjoy it! I have read thorugh it a few times and it isn't as detialed as some of the following chapters because i didn't want it too long. So enjoy the first chapter

The small cruiser silently sped towards battle. A sleek oval dome which then led on to a small tubular neck that widened at the back. Half way down this neck were 2 small curving structures that together on each side of the neck looked like a crescent. Where the neck got wider were two huger flanking wing like structures that curved forward. These structures added a second crescent shape to the back of ship, it could be described slightly like a boats anchor. The wing like hull was where most of the components were housed. It was a dull dark metallic grey colour and was made up of metal plating with dark purple lines separating the curving plates. The bridge, crew quarters and life support was found in the front oval dome alongside two Shield Depleters, the front was also home to the combat sensors and ECM defences. In the tubular neck the two primary and secondary shield generators were placed. The rest of the Components were found in the larger wings. 6 Jacketed Photon Engines, a solar sail, the emergency resupply pod and two large level 3 Quantum Torpedoes. It was a masterful ship, all coated in stealth armour that allowed the ship to use low-level cloak when needed. The Tamarrian Ascension class Cruiser, the pinnacle of Tamarr Technology. It cruised towards the alien battlecruiser, barely visible except when the twin suns highlighted it’s armour. The mood on the ship’s bridge was tense. Against the Taeron Battle Cruiser they were hopelessly outgunned, the Taeron had an alien beam weapon that pierced their shields easily. Beside them though was a Phong Afognak battlecruiser. It was a lot thinner than the Tamarrian ship, but it was deadly, hundreds of little lights shined out from it’s grey hull that glinted different colours because of it’s crystalline armour. On board most hands were on the bridge, scanning communications frequencies for distress calls, manoeuvring the ship, checking the shield levels. In the middle of this stood an alien in a black robe. It had a hairless head, large tear drop eyes and 4 arms; also it had a long neck, no nose and mouth and a red sash over it’s shoulder from one side to the other, dressed in the same uniform as most of the aliens on the bridge, although others had different coloured sash. This particular alien had some valuable medals on it’s, he was making weird harmonic noises obviously communicating with his crew. Its name was Cyria E'diar. High Kah’tal of the Tamarrian fleet and the most decorated military official in Tamarrian history. The Battle plan was simple. The Tamarrian ship would get into optimal firing range and open fire with its Depleters and Torpedoes. This would damage the Taeron Battlecruiser then the Phong would take the fire from the enemy. Its Special Phased Shield Technology was effective against the Taeron alien beams. The Afognak would then open fire with its 2 huge crystalline energy magnifying cannons, ripping the Taeron ship apart. The two allies stopped and waited, the Phong ship slightly in front to absorb the fire. They knew their ECM was more advanced than the Taeron, but they also knew the Taeron had sufficient scanners to defeat the Afognak’s electromagnetic counter measures. The Ascension was safer with its armour giving them a 5% defensive bonus. But that didn’t help in the battle. The Taeron headed close range and caught the Afognak out of position. On board Cyria’s harmonic noises were fast and intense.
“Pilot! Get us facing that ship now; he’s caught the Phong out of position! Weap’s fire at will once you have a clear shot!” The Ascension tried to get itself in position to fire and the Taeron’s opened fire. A stream of purple Polaron beams raked the side of the Ascension, purple explosions ripping through the hull taking out a shield generator and an engine. Deep gouges scarred the side of the Ascension as it got into position and fired all it’s weapons. Firstly the two shield depleters fired and the Taeron’s shields burst into colour, almost like fire they swirled round the gold and blue ship, constantly being lowered. Then two purple bursts were fired from the larger wings. They streamed effortlessly through space and exploded against the shields. Two large Purple fireballs tried to rip their way through the shields but they held! The Phong by now had pulled into position and opened fire with its High Energy Magnifiers. A multicoloured beam fired from them and one bLasted its way against the golden shields. Eventually the Taeron’s Shields fell and the second bLast took out a huge section of the front curving wing, destroying a phased Polaron beam and melting its way through all 4 layers of titanium armour. The Ascension was retreating by now, waiting for it’s quantum Torpedoes to reload but the Taeron again opened fire upon them. This time the front took most the damage and the Afognak’s crew watched in horror as the bridge and life supports were vaporised, thick purple plumes of smoke leaked out of the ship, swirling around in space. Before it hit Cyria saw the beams heading towards them and gave the order for everyone escape pods but they had barely moved when the beams ripped through the hull. The Phong’s crew saw the aftermath as the survivors were sucked out into space. Their lungs exploding and dying instantly, they floated limply through the cold void. For the next few hours the Taeron finished off the Ascension and then tried to retreat. The two ships battled for positions with the Phong taking heavy damage from the Taeron’s beams. The Two ships attacked and retreated, again and again. Eventually the Phong lost their Last HEM Cannon and had to retreat, the Taeron though had lost 2 engines and the space between the two wounded ships grew. For the Tamarrian/Phong Alliance, this battle was a disaster, now nothing except a weaponless hull of a Afognak class Phong Battle cruiser stood between the Tamarrian Homeworld and the Taeron fleet, times were getting rather dark indeed…

Thats the first chapter, hope it's good, eventually when the Fanfiction site is up i'll post it there as well

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Old April 10th, 2003, 08:52 PM

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I like your sytle... especially how you blended in tangible game components. Related it to the gaming experience very well.

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Nice read. Looking forward to more.
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I'm suprised i got two favourable reviews as i believe this isn't as strong as other chapters i've written so hopefully they'll be enjoyable to read. I was nervous about posting this as it is my least favourite chapter. Thanx for the support

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Finally got a minute or two to read the story.
Great job RD. I liked that chapter alot, and if you say that was the worst chapter that you have written; I can't wait for the next ones! This looks like it will be a great story indeed.
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I can brag that "the King" likes my work, any places open for an official scribe
LOL... you are certainly a contender! Lots of talent in the forums as well. I have to catch up with some of the other authors' work too. A nice diVersion indeed.

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Primitive read story, Primitive like story, Primitive want more.

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Yep, It's good.
Heavier on the scenic description than the aliens thoughts and emotions. But as they all died it would have been a bad investment to build up the characters

The headline "Liebration of Tamarr" makes me wonder, will it be conquered and then liberated by the Tamerrians or will the Taerons "liberate" it?

I will read the rest of the story aswell!

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I'm currently rewriting the first few new chapters so i thought i would post the Tamarrian Races Biology, Society and History descriptions! Hopefully will have the next chapter up tomorrow

>Welcome to Tamarrian Databanks On Alpha Leonis IIX
>Please enter your Tamarrian Data Chip
>>>Scanning…
>Welcome Advisor Maliki Shamayan
>>Access Approved to enter Tamarrian First Contact Frequency…

Tamarrian Biology
The Tamarrian Continuum is made up entirely of the Tamarrian Race. They can be loosely be described as bi-pedal. Their skin ranges from dark and light purple to dark blues, usually with strange natural coloured markings. Unlike other bipeds in the galaxy like the Phong or Hedres they have many noticeable differences. They have 4 arms and 2 long legs, both of which are extremely strong, thin and long. They have a small spherical body with very light layers of fat deposits that makes them prone to low temperatures. The shoulders and chest of the body is dominated by a large bony chest plating which extends over the shoulders. It is padded with cartilage and muscle underneath to protect where the twin hearts, lungs and other specialist organs lie. This bony structure then goes up and forms the neck. The neck is slightly long and supports their light heads. The Tamarrian head is medium sized and is mainly filled up by their brain, their eyes are slightly more tear shaped than most races and are usually pure black. Where most bipeds have a mouth and nose there is just flesh, with a slight vertical opening which serves as a mouth and nose, this opening is also an air filter which destroys toxins in the air so it is suitable to breathe in. The Tamarrian’s don’t have external ears. Instead they had 3 small holes, two on the each side of their head and one at the back. Tamarrian’s senses were extremely acute, with excellent eyesight, smell and hearing. Coupled with their small size and extra muscular limbs they were extremely agile and can do most tasks a lot faster than most species. This explains the little time it takes the Tamarrian’s to create grand architectural cities and grand ships; this has earned them the label of Hardy Industrialists. Tamarrian’s also carry a metallic arm piece on their lower right arm. This monitors their health and contains their Tamarrian Data card that contains the History and general information of that Tamarrian. If a Tamarrian falls ill these arm pieces can diagnose them and, if serious, can contact the Tamarrian’s Health service. They are immune to a certain level of poisons and toxins and are resilient to most diseases.

Society Description
The Tamarrian’s are extremely religious. This was caused by the way Tamarrian’s decomposed. Usually 2 days after they died they decompose in a brilliant flash of light, a chemical reaction caused by the decaying of their insides, they believe that at this point they “Ascend”. This motivates the entire society. They believe once they ascend they can become one with nature. This has caused the Tamarrian’s to become extremely careful and protective with nature, and many of their cities flourish with exotic fauna. The Continuum is ruled by 10 High Priests, 2 high priests come from 1 of the 5 cults that make up the basis of the Tamarrian Religion. There is also a High Omnicron who represented the Tamarr race has a whole. The 5 cults that make up the societies are: The Warrior Cult. They believe they have to protect the Tamarrian’s and their planets, they effectively rule the Military. The Time cult who represents those who create the minerals and resources for the empire to use, they believe that if they optimise their time they will reach Ascension through helping the Tamarrian Society. Then there was the Nature Cult who believes that by caring for the planets and nature of the Tamarrian Continuum they will ascend. The Seers who are dedicated to learning and education, they believe by further advancing the technologies of the Continuum they will ascend. Lastly was the Ascension cult whom believe that through driving themselves to perfection in everything they do they will reach Ascension. Every cult works with each other and Tamarrian law is based on rules and guidelines from all of these cults. There is no internal fighting between the sects and the people enjoy a peaceful life

General History
The Tamarrian Continuum began it’s era as a Space faring race just over 50 years ago. The planet they evolved on had 5 separate continents, and for many years 5 different Governments ruled over the planet. But after many wars and technological advancement, which created greater and greater threat to the people, the Tamarrian’s overthrew the corrupt governments and placed the Priests in charge of the Society. After many new laws were passed that gave the people more freedom the Tamarrian’s discovered the sufficient technology to move out into space. It wasn’t long before they found alien life and placed a knowledgeable scholar named A’tush to represent them to the Aliens. They have so far proposed and maintained many successful treaties with the neighbouring life forms. However After a long war with the Taeron, which thankfully only resulted in the loss of one planet, they are now under a protectorate, which the Taeron wish to expand to a Subjugation treaty and to the extent of unconditional surrender.
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It escapes me how people can come up with stories and ideas and then sit and put them to paper. The attention and dedication you all must have is amazing. Bravo.

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