Re: A War for the Stars
Looks good. I'd change a few minor things :
- I'd add a link to part II at the end of part I (page 4).
- The footnotes on page 2, part I are sort of silly, you can cut them out if you want (not the others).
- The Last note in the Appendix (month/tenth) is also not necessary, I'd remove it.
- One of the Posts in part II has a note at the bottom (2404.5, I think) which should be removed, it bears no relation to the story itself.
And two questions : part II will have no 'pages', it'll just be one long sequence ? Also, why not '(c) the author, used with permission' ?
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