Need advice from FanFic writers

[Starhawk]

Ah your right, thanks I'll try that.

Though to be honest I did think I put more commas and periods in then I did.
I suppose that's why I should leave it for two or so days though right?

Yeah I was considering that, because some of the stuff that I wrote down in my notes (such as a few colonies being established) I figured are unimportant to the story overall, because if those colonies ever come into play I can just make up some background.

The two main worlds though are of course Icara (being homeworld and Capital to the Icaran Empire) and Brandenburg (first and largest colony established by Icara).