OT: Hell is For Heroes.

[AgentZero]

TurinTurambar said:
Nah, they aren't dead... "and then the darkness overcame him" is just supposed to make you think "dead."

Hmm... That's a good point actually. I'll have to rewrite that bit to make the fact that he's dead a bit more clear. That's the problem with being all poetical and stuff. Lets people make their own minds up about things.
How about... "And then he died." Blunt, to the point, no wriggle room.
Or maybe "And then he wasn't alive anymore." Also blunt and to the point, though there's a marginal amount of wriggle room if you want to debate the exact meaning of 'alive.'
"And then, the tight grip they had on one and other loosened, and they died." I quite like this one. A bit more poetical, plus it's quite obvious that they both die.

Agent Zero scurries off to work on the rewrite