MP Chronicles_EA: Second-pass Signup and Discussion - Page 27

Wrana · #1 February 15th, 2009, 03:40 PM

I wouldn't be so sure, considering...

Ruminant · #2 February 16th, 2009, 08:40 AM

There was a little confusion regarding CBM versions so I'm going to have to delay a few more hours, sorry all!

Ruminant · #3 February 16th, 2009, 03:41 PM

And we're off.

Edit: Got rid of the stupid. At least the visible parts.. *shifty eyes*

Darkwind · #4 February 16th, 2009, 07:28 PM

So I'm the only one to post a story on turn 1? Shame on you all! Especially you guys who didn't even post a prologue!

Incabulos · #5 February 16th, 2009, 10:19 PM

didn't want to write anything until I knew something about my surroundings. Will post it within the next 24 hours :P

Mithras · #6 February 17th, 2009, 04:55 PM

Hey I managed to get a story on to both pages of the wiki without completely destrying the site! I'll just pat myself on the back and ignore the bit at the top thats evidently not supposed to be there...

Darkwind · #7 February 17th, 2009, 05:08 PM

By the way, Mithras, paragraph 6? is a little weird. A quote mark is missing and the tense switches to present and back. In paragraph 8?, there's a bit of confusion at the beginning between singular (Androphag) and plural (their swords), and yet more tense confusion. Paragraph 9, it's enmity not enemity.

We want these to look as good as possible for the viewers right?

Just in case you feel angered by my instinct to edit the writings of others, in the honors english classes I've been in many people were far, far worse than you, switching tense all the time, forgetting that commas and even periods exist, and just in general making large, silly oversights. I won't claim I'm free of them either.

Mithras · #8 February 18th, 2009, 04:13 AM

I'm not annoyed in any way, constructive criticism is good.

I'm looking into the tense switch but I did leave Androphag as it is on purpose. Androphags just sounds wrong to me and I haven't seen it used anywhere so Androphag is going the way of sheep for this write up. (Feel free to chide me when I inevitably begin to use Androphags)

There fixed, I think. Anyways I don't even have the excuse of not being a native so thanks for that.

rdonj · #9 February 18th, 2009, 04:56 AM

Androphagi? Androphages!

Wrana · #10 February 18th, 2009, 05:03 AM

First variant is almost right, I guess... Probably Androphagoi, though...