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		Thanks S_J. Excuse my self-pitying whinges back there.  
 
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		Chapter 12 is up. Maybe I'll save some of the sinisterness for later. 
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		Chapter 14 is up. Minor cosmetic tweaks have been made to some previous chapters, but nothing worth re-reading them for. 
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		The top of the page for chapter 14 says 'Chapter 13' -- recycling the previous page as a form for the next one has its minor hazards...     
Very interesting. I figured that's who she'd turn out to be when she first appeared, though.      Darn if I can make the faintest at guess what the 'big plot' behind all of this is, though.  
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
		
	
		
		
	
	
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Seriously, I've been trying to heavily signpost the possibility of Sloo as the escapee, all the while implying that she's a vicious, unstable, manipulative and highly dangerous psychopath. I was kind of hoping to make Cane's innocent friendship with her as sinister as possible. Egomaniac that I am, I like to imagine that everyone's been biting their fingernails in anticipation of the Chapter where she finally turns. At the same time I've been trying to foster a sense of "this is too obvious, it can't be her... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
		
			
		
		
		
		
		
		
	
		
		
	
	
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				Seriously, I've been trying to heavily signpost the possibility of Sloo as the escapee, all the while implying that she's a vicious, unstable, manipulative and highly dangerous psychopath. I was kind of hoping to make Cane's innocent friendship with her as sinister as possible. Egomaniac that I am, I like to imagine that everyone's been biting their fingernails in anticipation of the Chapter where she finally turns. At the same time I've been trying to foster a sense of "this is too obvious, it can't be her...
			
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