Space Empires Volume 1: Space Empire

[Sabin]

Thank you, sir. I will try to reduce the amount of commas I make use of, though that may take time. That is because it seems that I have developed some bad typing habits over the years.

SPACE EMPIRES VOLUME I: Space Empire
Chapter V: Isolationist Policy
Stardate: 2440.00


Terra Nova II was attacked and the colony on it was destroyed by a Klingon vessel. The defense force arrived too late to save the planet, but they managed to destroy the Klingon vessel-barely. They suffered heavy casualties, and only one remains, and it is too damaged to conduct battle operations. A replacement force is being created. In the battle, the Klingon vessel destroyed all but one of the unshielded Saber MK.IIIs. The remaining one was crippled, and the Saber MK.IV fought the enemy vessel in hit and run attacks, but got moderately damaged. The Klingon vessel was heavily damaged before it attacked Terra Nova II, and apparently did so in a final act of desperation, which was quite effective. It nearly destroyed the Saber MK.IV, but it ran out of fuel before it could do so, at which point it's shields were deactivated, and the weapons disabled. The Saber MK.IV destroyed the Klingon vessel. However, the Saber MK.IV was destroyed due to a weapon malfunction on the Saber MK.III, which was fatal.

Our information about Doralis being unoccupied was wrong. In that system, there are multiple Borg colonys, which seem to be quite well off, for now. The assault is to begin within two months, and colonization vessals would be prepared. Doralis has been cleared of all known Borg infestations, and the older Saber MK.IIIs and IVs are being replaced entirely by the newer Saber MK.V. Also, a project has been begun by the Space Empire to optimize the planets that are under it's control. It has not been yet proven how effective this project may be. Earliest results are predicted to occur in one year and five months. A new exploration vessel that weighs 850kt has been in construction. It's name has been determined to be the Pegasus Soaring, which is be primarily an exploration vessel. However, it is very heavily armed, perhaps more so then any other vessel encountered, though the Space Empire's admirals are not betting on it, according to my information sources. Construction is to be completed in 3 months.

The Pegasus Soaring has been completed. It is now going to be sent to the far north-east section of the known galaxy to conduct general exploration, according to the official Space Empire website. Also, the same website cites that construction on a "Mobile Shipyard" has begun. Recently, Starfleet Command and Ferengi vessels have begun to colonize the Doralis System, which would make the Space Empire's bid for that system much more difficult, since breaking away from either race may result in a large amount of loss for the Space Empire.

The Doralis System has been lost to the Ferengi and Starfleet Command. This is due to that our colonization vessels were too far behind to colonize the worlds there, and even they got there in time, the Space Empire managed to forget about loading the vessels with colonists. The Space Empire has picked a different system to conquer. Triala has been chosen. The main reason to do so according to official and unofficial sources is that a beachhead can be established in Klingon territory, which should aid our attempt to defeat the Klingons. They are isolated in that area, which is a good and bad possibility for our forces. The Klingons can't be infiltrated easily, but they are trapped in that area, which leads to several other systems.

A trio of a new class of vessel is being constructed, the Galaxy-class. These are warships, meant to battle the powerful Klingon vessels that will be encountered. Conquering Triala will be quite difficult according to our intelligence, due to the location, which is infested with Klingon vessels. It is a gamble that may very well destroy a large portion of the Space Empires forces. However, such a loss is acceptable since the Space Empire has a sufficient number of ships to protect it's borders if the attack fails. Also, the Pegasus Soaring is nearing the unexplored region. Once it's scouting has been completed, it will be assigned to the Triala System, to assist the war effort.

On Stardate 2442.03 it was decided that the invasion fleet is to be trained, and to create a flagship. The new Galaxy-X's weight is 1,000kt, and is a far more powerful vessel then the regular Galaxy, though quite expensive. Also, another galaxy-class vessel is to be added. This fleet appears to be the strongest one that has ever been created by the Space Empire. However, it is still somewhat questionable if such a deep strike into enemie territory can suceed. Also, there are concerns about the colonization vessels: Their shields are outdated, at only 5th generation technology. Accordingly, new colonization vessels are being developed to replace this class.

The Galaxy-X has been launched, and shall retain the name. The invasion is almost ready, but the training of the crew aboard the Galaxy-X has yet to be completed. The alteration of the atmospheres that has been conducted upon planets of the Space Empire that lack oxygen has been completed in the Sol System, which has expanded the amount of space available for new facilities. It has been decided by the Space Empire that this is an extremely valuable way to improve the quality of a planet, and has decided to make it a requirement. Disaster for the Pegasus Soaring has been averted: It nearly went into a star-less system without a large supply of fuel. It could have been marooned there without any stars to supply it the energy required for crossing. It was also found that the intelligence stratedgy of the Space Empire had a large hole that allowed for a single monh as a window for sabotage to occur. It has been believed to be corrected, which should prevent many problems in the future.


Stardate 2443.06
The assault has begun, but an incredible event occured: The Idran warp point has been closed. The Klingon system is truely isolated according to the pre-recorded Messages we have recieved, and we probably won't know more for 10 or so more years, since there is currently no way to enter the Klingon systems. This means if the attack succeeds, those systems would be exclusively owned by the Space Empire, since no other race can enter, either...but on the other hand, if the Klingons win, they may very well become much stronger. The closing of the warp point was intentional, as part of the stratedgy to conquer the Klingon systems, and was carried out by a varient of the Galaxy-class, the Anti-Warp Field Frigate.

[Sabin]

Please tell me if my writing has decreased or increased in quality. Thank you.

SPACE EMPIRES VOLUME I: Space Empire
Chapter VI: Wargame
Stardate: 2446.01


Ever since the operation has started, there has been much tension in the Space Empire, and it seems to be directed towards destroying the Klingons in this section of the galaxy. The Space Empire has created the new Saber-X class which is to replace the older Saber MK.V, which has been insufficient for combat in modern times, as proven by the lack of ability when it fights against Klingon vessels, even when in Groups. The Pegasus Soaring has been recalled since it has completed the Last of it's scouting mission, which has prompted the construction of a replacement scouting vessel. The construction of such vessels to replace the Last generation has begun. The older ships are to be applied in destroying the Klingon menance, which has taken unneccersary agression against the Space Empire.

The General Assault Fleet is assembling in the Cor Corali System, where the final preperation are to begin. While this assault fleet seem quite strong, it probably will get destroyed when it attempts to remove the Klingon infestation, since it lacks the advanced technology and design knowledge that our other fleet had...


The "Sovereign" was quickly closing the gap between it and three other warships, towards a battle that may result in it's destruction. The captain, 'Laplace' began issuing further orders: "Order all ships to concentrate fire on that Saber-X to the right, and do so until it is destroyed." He continued, after a short pause. "Also, conduct evasive manuevers and rotate our ships periodically so that the shields would Last longer by delaying their collapse." The officers that occupied the appropriate stations confirmed that they acknowledge with a variety of responses, ranging from grunts to "Aye Aye, Captain." Laplace watched with intent at the screen as the two other ships that combined to be the small fleet under his command attacked the Saber X. His own ship, dubbed the Sovereign, a prototype starship, launched it's own heavy payload of firepower. The Saber X's shields held up until the Sovereign's attack was added, and they promptly fell, and some of the photon torpedos raced through, tearing apart some of the armor and some other items. The grand ship Sovereign bucked slightly under the huge amount of firepower that was directed at it in return, but the firepower from the three other ships could not beat down it's shields, though subduing them somewhat, as it retreated from the enemy ships to reduce the power of the weapons directed at it.

The enemy ships caught up with the Sovereign, but one of them was attacked by the Sovereign's escort, and sustained heavy damage. However, the Sovereign destroyed it, with a special weapon that tore right through the shields and hull of the unfortunate vessel, the Ram Phaser, which was a giant, and powerful, phaser that generated so much power, that it's attack potential was rated at 800, a truely devestating weapon, but can only be fired once every 3 minutes. The Sovereign and it's escorts scattered in order to flee from the remaining two ships. One of them was headed off by the enemy however, and the assaulted that it was quickly put under reduced the shields to nothing. It was almost destroyed, but it's armor prevented the damage from getting through. The Sovereign and the other Saber MK.V quickly came to the aid of their beseiged companion. They quickly laid waste to other Saber-X, and defeated it's shields. Unfortunately, the enemy vessels pursued the weakened Saber MK.V. Within a short time, over 90% of it's hull was destroyed. The Sovereign and it's cohort attacked the Saber-X and dissolved it's shields. The Saber MK.V fired it's payload as it neared the enemy ship, and then it crashed into the enemy vessel, causing significant damage, but not destroying the Saber-X...but the combined firepower of the Sovereign and the remaining Saber MK.V did it in.

Only the variation of the Galaxy-X remained. It tried to defeat the Sovereign, but it's shields only warded off the multiple phasers and photon torpedo attacks for a few minutes. The shields simply recovered after an attack, but return fire knocked them down in return. Eventually, a lucky shot his the EMC unit the ship contained, and with the loss of it, the defensive ability of the powerful ship fell by 30%, and that quickly proven to be it's downfall, as the attacks rained down upon the shields, and quickly overwhelmed them so much that a larger amount of attacks hit the hull of the vessel. A few shield generators were destroyed, and the next volley sent forth tore through more of the ship, rending over 50% of the ship useless. It returned fire, but it was subdued. The Sovereign took the firepower heavily though, since it was at blank range. However, it's shields held, and it continued to fire it's deadly payload, which drilled through more of it's foe, rendering it into a smoking and flaming hulk. The flames died away, as the scene dispersed.

The simulated battle was over and the crews of each ship sighed in relief. Laplace contacted the other captains and congratulated each. The scientists did so in turn too. It was decided the new sovereign design was a powerful beast, one that would serve the Space Empire well once a few were in produced.

[Cipher7071]

Improvement noted. The first three paragraphs look pretty good. Then, as the action heats up, you run into a little trouble:

However, the Sovereign destroyed it, with a special weapon that tore right through the shields and hull of the unfortunate vessel, the Ram Phaser, which was a giant, and powerful, phaser that generated so much power, that it's attack potential was rated at 800, a truely devestating weapon, but can only be fired once every 3 minutes.

How about this instead:

However, the Sovereign destroyed it with a special weapon that tore right through the shields and hull of the unfortunate vessel. The a Ram Phaser, a giant and powerful weapon, generated so much power that it's attack potential was rated at 800. It was a truly devastating weapon, but could only be fired once every three minutes.

Smoother??

[ February 29, 2004, 14:18: Message edited by: Cipher7071 ]

[Sabin]

I will try to reduce the amount of commas.(again) In any case, is the writing for the action sequence too bland, or not emotional enough?

[narf poit chez BOOM]

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[Sabin]

I will read that material during my meals. Thank you for providing the information required for the perusal of the matierial in question.

SPACE EMPIRES VOLUME I: Space Empire
Chapter VII: Operation Alteration
Stardate: 2443.07


Not much has been occuring recently, but it appears that events have been accelerating. The Space Empire has recently constructed a new vessel to head the fleet that has been assigned to destroy the Klingons. It should soon finish the repair work on the vessels in the fleet and move out. However, despite the ship being the latest Version of the Saber series, there still have been worries that the fleet is too hold to hold out well in combat, and would suffer heavy losses. The Pegasus Soaring was recently destroyed by space mines when it attempted to traverse a wormhole, unfortunately. A new crew has been selected for what has been now named the Pegasus Reborn.

This Version of the Pegasus series is to conduct further explorations, to check if there are any civilizations we are not aware of yet, and to survey enemy systems. The "Sovereign" a next-generation vessel design, appears to be nearing the final stages of re-design, assuring the quality of it. However, it has been decided that the design is to be reserved for a crisis, as a suprise for enemies of the Space Empire. The Pegasus Reborn has been launched, and it just left the Sol System. This flight of it is going to serve another purpose: To find out how improved the prototype fuel systems would work, in comparision to older models. It has been found that the older ships ran out of fuel quickly, and did not recover at an acceptable pace. Even during inactivity it took too long. The Pegasus Reborn has attacked a planet called Deneb Kaitos I, and removed the Klingon population and drone carrier. Next month, estimations of the fuel system's efficiency shall be complete.

The tests are positive. The fuel efficiency is sufficient enough to recover fuel reserves when need be, and the new system has been integrated with future designs. The Delta Vega Society, a faction of the Borg, has offered the Space Empire a non-agression treaty, which has been signed in agreement in all due haste. The Pegasus Reborn has conducted a battle against a Mevyap V, a Klingon vessel that was heavily damaged before the Pegasus Reborn has found it. The Mevyap V fell quickly before the Pegasus Reborn, it's damage too extensive for it to be capable of fighting effectively. The Pegasus Reborn moved to Trill III and removed a Klingon infestation. It continued to Trill II, repeated the process, and is now at rest in the Regulon System. That system contains three stars, which should accelerate the fuel recovery system greatly.

(The author's room aboard the Space Palace.)
The author removed himself from the desk he occupied, and decided that a short walk was in order. He opened an ornate door and stepped into a hallway that was a dull grey with a window that allowed one to examine the area outside the space station. The figure of the author continued it's journey and into a turbolift. He decided upon his destination: The game room. Upon reaching it, he examined his surroundings and designated where he will place himself. He walked towards a small and isolated cubicle and entered it. Upon entering it, he closed it's door and took a computer console. He scrolled through the available game options, and selected Space Empires X. He began playing, along with a large group of other players. The inside of the cubicle had many sounds and lights appear, though they seemed subdued, unlike most other games. He played through the night, his figure becoming more gaunt as he played on. Despite the small fridge that was his companion, he began to tire from exhaustion. Eventually he fell asleep at his desk. Hours later he woke up. He continued playing so that the game would not be delayed. To him the day became the night again and what joined the night was his defeat at the hands of another player. He removed himself from the desktop and returned to his domain. He took to sleep with a vengence. Once the bright sun appeared again, he awoke and resumed his work...

(The Space Palace control room.)
She gazed at what was on her screen, in awe. It was still hard for her to believe that such a large project was taking place, and would be completed in five months. The objects she was obsessing over was the new Starbase space station design. It weighed in at 2500kt, and it was to replace the original Space Palce. The Starbase appeared to be an extremely powerful thing, considering that it's weapons are capable of tearing down the shields and armor of enemy vessels, and that it can construct starships rather quickly, not to mention the advantages of having Earth and the Space Station MK.I nearby. It would make the capital of the Space Empire incredibly difficult to take. "Ahem" She turned quickly to the source, and faced the Grand Master. He began to speak. "What is the progress of the new Space Palace?" She replied, in a rather quiet and subdued voice: "Barely begun, but it will take only 5 months for it to be completed." She continued speaking. "Also sir, Project S, the greatest possible project we have ever embarked upon, has been going at a steady pace, but it will still take 24 or so more months, maybe even more." He nodded as he began stroking and tugging his beard, and began to speak once more. "I see. Carry on." He turned and left the command center, his course laid towards the conference room. She sighed, glad that nothing unfortunate occured to her. She knew from the base gossip and the like that he was a good person, but it was hard getting used to the man, considering he looked rather outlandish, with that beard and wearing black on a constant basis...

(Earth, at the Anaheim Electronics Research Center)
She picked up the cardboard box, and walked out of her lab for the final time. She felt disappointed, having just joined the research team, and now being laid off...it shattered her dreams of becoming a great scientist. Ever since the Grand Master decided to reduce the scientific efforts of the Space Empire by 99.99 percent, all of the labs have lost their funding, including the ones on the Earth. She entered a crowded elevator that was filled with many other people like herself, and barely managed to press the button that began the elevator's journey to the surface. Over the music the elevator generated, she heard the many grumbles and complaints that the other occupants had about the situation. They ranged from how unfair it was, to speculation as to why this occured. She tried to find a sliver of silver lining mentally and found it. After all, the economy was in a incredibly strong position, and seemed to be getting stronger without hesistation. In fact, the finances of the Space Empire have doubled over the Last 12 months, and was actually expected to quadruple over the next 12. At the very least, she would manage to get a decent residence, which is actually quite good in this day and age. The elvator created the customary "bing", and the doors opened to reveal a hallway that was already being modified to suit the building's new purpose. She walked through the halls, her high heels periodically clicking as she traversed the distance between the elevator and the exit of the building. An hour later, she reached her homestead. Within it's bowels, she activated her computer. Once it finished booting up, she initiated the E-Mail check and began to enter addresses into her web browser so that she may search for a new occupation. She heard the E-Mail application begin it's short sound effect that indicated new mail.

She saw there was only one. She opened it up, and lo behold, there was her new job. She quickly sent a reply. Within three weeks, she walked down the corridors of the building she vacated a month ago once again, working for the Civilian Intelligence Agency.

[narf poit chez BOOM]

Originally posted by Sabin:
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