Othaglot and Cane - Story Thread

[spacefan]

The Fazrah description says they are an aquatic race originally, and oxygen breathing. They might be a bit warlike for your purposed though. Who knows.

[dmm]

Good story, but so far Othaglot is coming off as inferior to Cane, which is probably not what you'd intended.

[ June 07, 2002, 16:31: Message edited by: dmm ]

[geoschmo]

Inferior? You think? I am not getting that at all. Perhaps less comfortable with the situation. But that is to be expected I think considering he is not as used to dealing with alien cultures as Cane is.

Not to mention the fact that an criminal investigator in the Cue Cappa race would not have the same skill level as his human counterpart. My impession so far is that Cue Cappa soceity is more structured, so there would be less crime to investigate.

Cue investigators are probably more like accident investigators, what happened, how, and why, cause and effect. Where a Cane would be more used to dealing with personalities, lying, and other duplicitousness that a member of a psychic race would have little experience with.

I am looking forward to seeing where Otho can bring something constuctive to the investigation though besides just keeping Cane company. But it's still early. They are just now really getting into the investigation.

Geoschmo

[dogscoff]

I wanted to keep the balance of power/ usefulness quite even, with the two characters taking the lead alternately. Of course, I'm still getting to know them myself, so it might take me a while to get this right.

Othaglot comes into his own a bit more from Chapter 6 onwards.

I've just written Chapter 5, but won't be posting it for a day or two. I think it's my favourite chapter so far - we get some decent evidence and the mystery starts to open up a little.

BTW, if anyone ever gets any ideas about the mystery, please don;t post them here - you might spoil it for others if you get it right.
I'd be happy to accept emails on the subject though. I won't tell you if you're right or not, but I'd be interesting to see what paths my puzzle leads ppl down.

[ June 08, 2002, 15:17: Message edited by: dogscoff ]

[dogscoff]

Chapter 5 is up. Sorry about the delay, I've had it written (and chapter 6 & 7 too=-) nd ready for a week, but haven't had time to upload it.
Click my banner and then click "fiction".

Slight tweaks to previous chapters, but nothing important- cosmetic changes only, really.

CapnQ - Thanks for your message. I couldn't see the error you mentioned though.

[Baron Munchausen]

Now chapter 5 is much more interesting. There still doesn't seem to be quite the same amount of 'thought processes' going on but I guess that's to be expected when the narrator is not an alien.

I'll be interested to know how Cane gets through the firefight without being killed, since he is unarmed? Hopefully not without personal armor or 'shield' or something...

[capnq]

dogscoff: I just sent a second PM quoting the sentence.

I don't think I'll be able to read Chapter 5 tonight, unfortunately.