The Cleansing Part II

[ManOfWar]

This is one topic that should not be bumped. Dude, you really need to improve upon your writing skills. No offense, just an observation. Do you have a community College near where you live? If so, they may be able to help you "brush up" on many aspects of writing.

I like what your trying to do, your story is an interesting read, but the errors make it hard to follow.

Please keep posting new additions, but also please work on the errors.

[Phoenix-D]

ManOfWar: you really do need to learn some tact..

Phoenix-D

[Suicide Junkie]

Dear god, don't let ManofWar see Lord Kodos' early Posts!

[Atrocities]

Thanks MoW for the insight. I should point out that I am blind and that whooked no phoniks weroked ruof ne.