Hevordah Imperium - Story thread - Updated 6-13-03!

[Ragnarok]

I guess you're right. You didn't need the bump you were probably still reading it due to it being so long.

But thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it. I too enjoyed this chapter more then any of the others it was so good that I just could not stop writing it. I hope to continue it's greatness in the next chapter.

The tension between the Captain and the XO was just for added depth to the story. I wanted to break away from Qullum for a little bit. Hopefully the chapter after next I will break away even more from Qullum and focus in on some side stories.

But thanks again for the great feedback. I thought it was a good story but didn't think it was that good.

[mlmbd]

rags, BELIEVE! It is that good.

mlmbd

[Ragnarok]

Originally posted by mlmbd:
rags, BELIEVE! It is that good.

mlmbd

Thanks again.

Only part I am slightly dissapointed with is the ending. I could not capture the looks on everyones faces when they saw what they saw on the screen. (Which we find out next chapter what it was.) But it will do. To me one of the parts of a story that you want to be good is the ending. To get people motivated to come back and read the next installment. But I am sure you, mlmbd, will come back even if the ending was bad.

[capnq]

Just wanted to assure you that mlmbd isn't the only one reading and enjoying your story.

I especially like the parts that describe Hedorvah society from their own viewpoint. Describing an alien culture without sounding like a college lecture can be tricky.

[ December 21, 2002, 20:00: Message edited by: capnq ]

[mlmbd]

rags, you are right

But I am sure you, mlmbd, will come back even if the ending was bad.

Although I would assume someone posted the story as 'you'. If it were bad, I mean!

Being that it is a text story. Might be a little difficult (even for U) for people to actually see them and their expressions!

mlmbd

[Ragnarok]

Originally posted by capnq:
I especially like the parts that describe Hedorvah society from their own viewpoint. Describing an alien culture without sounding like a college lecture can be tricky.

Yeah tell me about it. It is very hard to do so. When the story first started out there were alot of conversations that would make up the chapter. But as each chapter comes along I find myself being able to describe more from a third person point of view basically. Which adds alot more to the story.
I agree though, I enjoy being able to describe their culture from their own POV unstead of an aliens POV.

[mlmbd]

rags, so when might we see a new chapter? Just me, being me!

mlmbd